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That's alright
the reason I put it up is because on some other places, it's gotten good AND bad reviews and I was wondering what would spring up on here. 
Yes, I agree...I would stick to posting new work of yours--or at least within the last year. Something you write know will definitely be superior to something you wrote when you were nine, no matter how good you thought it was then.
My only critique is that it has almost a complete absence of punctuation, making it a sort of run-on-sentence-poem. Poetry & Punctuation by me, might help you out a bit on that one.
Other than that, if you wrote this when you were nine, and you are now 13, this is four years old. Don't give us your "worst" (I'm not calling it your worst, I'm only saying I'm sure you write better now than when you were nine) give us your best. Why should we critique if your only showing us partially how good you really can be on your own? Hope that wasn't too disheartening ^^'